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Students - When I saw this skirt, I knew it wanted to have a poem written in its honor. And I knew, too, that the poem had to be about twirling.
Before writing this poem last night, I had already decided that it would match some parts of a sonnet - 14 lines with 10 syllables per line. (In my poem, though, the last line has 11 syllables.) Today's poem does not rhyme each pair of alternate lines, yet it does have much in common with the sonnet form: the iambic pentameter rhythm, the end rhymes at half of the alternate lines, and a rhyming couplet at the end.
Below, you can see that I first mapped out the lines with bullet points. You can also see the rhyming words atop my page, and the iambic pentameter syllable beats too. This helps.
One thing to consider when writing in form. You do not want your poem to sound forced into an uncomfortable cage of form. Keep working and playing until your poemsound is natural, until it sounds like real human speech and not some strange backward-speaking alien.
Originally, I had written 'whirl' where 'swirl' is and 'swirl' where 'whirl' is. I changed it when reading aloud because of the 's' in 'layers.' Sometimes reading the same letter at the end of a word and then again at the beginning of the next word is just too strange, so this switch made the reading easier.
Recording poetry is one way to revise as it helps us hear in the real air what works and what does not. For you know, in our minds we can fool ourselves into believing that it all works. But in the real air, we hear the truth.
Skirt - Draft Page Spread #1
Photo by Amy LV
Would you like to see the skirt twirl? You can...here!
Today, I offer a giveaway of two books here: one copy of THE POETRY FRIDAY ANTHOLOGY FOR SCIENCE compiled by Sylvia Vardell and Janet Wong and one copy of my own FOREST HAS A SONG. Each Saturday of April, I have offered this same giveaway here, for eight books in all. Thank you to Sylvia and Janet for your generosity. Please leave a comment below, and I will draw two names next Thursday evening to be announced next Poetry Friday!
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