Pigeon
by Amy LV
You will notice two sets of rhyming words in this short poem. And you may also have noticed that there are fewer syllables in lines 7 and 8 than in lines 3 and 4...this may have surprised you. I considered having the last two lines read someting such as:
he starts my school day with delight (8 syllables - a match to - that when his feathers shimmer-glow)
instead of:
he fills me with delight (6 syllables)
But in the end, I decided to go for the shorter ending, to clip it a bit, to break what was to be an expected pattern. Working and reworking endings is something we often must do as writers of all genres.
It is a treat today to welcome fifth grade teacher Lindsey Holt and her poets from the Ladue Fifth Grade Center in St. Louis, Missouri, to The Poem Farm. Enjoy this peek into their spring poetry unit.
Here are some strategies that really helped my students find their inner poets!
One of the rituals we stuck to throughout our study of poetry was a read-aloud. We began with Sharon Creech's LOVE THAT DOG. We used a few guiding questions throughout: What are Jack's feelings about poetry? What are the elements of poetry as told by Jack? How does Jack's perspective on poetry change throughout the book and why? We kept these posted on anchor charts, and the students added post-its with evidence from the book throughout the unit.
The students felt a connection with the main character Jack because our study mimicked what his class did in the book. I also had students who did not necessarily love the idea of poetry, and this character validated their feelings. However, his transformation showed them that if he, the most reluctant of poets, was able to become passionate about it and proud of his work, then they could too. We also read the sequel, HATE THAT CAT, and my students are very disappointed that there is not a third! I would recommend that elementary teachers use these books during any study of poetry.
I also made sure to use a variety of mentor texts (both individual poems and volumes of poetry), and I had a bin full of books accessible to students throughout the unit (I've listed some of my and the students' favorites at the bottom). One of my favorite teacher books is STUDY DRIVEN by Katie Wood Ray, and in it she talks about the idea that students must first read widely that which you want them to write. We certainly did that, and along the way, my students discovered that poetry can be found out in the world but also in our hearts. Really, poetry is everywhere. Thus, when it was time for students to write their own poetry, it seemed very natural to them; it was no longer an intimidating or daunting task of writing.
Our favorite texts:
A POKE IN THE EYE: A COLLECTION OF CONCRETE POEMS by P.B. Janeczko
A KICK IN THE HEAD: AN EVERYDAY GUIDE TO POETIC FORMS by P.B. Janeczko
A FULL MOON IS RISING by Marilyn Singer
AFRICAN ACROSTICS by A. Harley
SPLASH! POEMS OF OUR WATERY WORLD by C. Levy
CONFETTI: POEMS FOR CHILDREN by P. Mora
POETRY FOR YOUNG PEOPLE: ANIMAL POEMS by J. Hollander
EDGAR ALLAN POE'S PIE: MATH PUZZLERS IN CLASSIC POEMS by J. Patrick Lewis
WHEN YOU'RE A PIRATE DOG AND OTHER PIRATE POEMS by Eric Ode
BEHOLD THE BOLD UMBRELLAPHANT AND OTHER POEMS by Jack Prelutsky
And here are some poems from our class:
Ghost of the Sea
Swimming quickly through
the sea
Swaying side to side
like a tree
I am the spider of
the sea.
What could I be?
It's a mystery.
I am a slippery, smooth, and
scary sight to see.
An octopus, an octopus
that's me.
Ghost of the sea.
by Jackson
Quatrain
I watch YouTube
While eating food
A lot to choose from
but I like only some
by Zac
Ripples
Rivers
Oceans and Streams
Swimming Quietly I
Believe that water has power
Not greed
by Jackson
Brother and Sister
Brother
Mad, Angry
Fighting, Hurting, Kicking
Always Crazy, Always Calm
Helping, Whispering, Quiet
Caring, Sweet
Sister
by Harrison
Sugar and Spice
Sugar
sweet, white
dumping, raining, dancing
You love it or hate it
burning, flaming, stining
hot, steamy
Spice.
by Lily
Spicy
Sweet? Oh no it's not,
Please escape my tongue.
I declare
Care!
Yummm, milk
by Lily
Mount. Poem
Grab a shovel
and come with me
to dig in the
mountain of poetry
Dig all day
the hole will grow
deeper into
the poem you'll go
When you've dug
a great big hole
you'll crash into
the poem's soul
An enormous cave
full of gold
words and wonders
poems untold
And when you've explored
every crook
bring a friend
to have a look
But never ever
fill up the hole
keep coming down
take a stroll
For the moment
that it is gone
You forget everything
in a single yawn
Read a poem
let it teach
all the things
that you can reach.
by Anika
Clang Went the Chime
Clang went the chime,
As it fell to the ground.
Clang went the chime,
As it fell to the ground.
Bang went the car,
As its door closed.
Bang went the car,
As its door closed.
Kaching went the cash register,
As money was made.
Kaching went the cash register,
As money was made.
by Alexandra
As I sat outside,
I saw the little robin,
Yes, and smiled he did.
by Alexandra
Much gratitude to Lindsey Holt and her students for joining us this Poetry Friday with their writing voices and ideas for learning more about poetry.
In celebration fun, today I finished a three visit Skype-through-Spring with the first graders at Darby Creek Elementary in Hilliard, Ohio. This morning I was treated to a sharing of children's poems, some written by individual students and some written together. And at the end of our time today, these young poets were surprised to each receive a copy of FOREST HAS A SONG, purchased by the Darby Creek PTO with signed bookplates I sent last week.
So many thank yous to the teachers and parents who made this exciting series possible. I learned a lot and loved following the journey of these poets through their teachers, their blogs, their Padlets, and their voices and faces on Skype. Here you can see teacher Cathy Mere's Tweet, posted the moment before children received their books!
The winners of last week's giveaway of Barry Lane's FORCE FIELD FOR GOOD CD are Linda A. and Rosi! Please send me an e-mail to amy at amylv dot com with your address, and I will pass it along to Barry. Thank you, Barry!
In case you did not see Tuesday's post, I had an extra this week. Click here to read the paper bag puppet poem and visit some kindergarten poets from Rochester, NY.
In celebration fun, today I finished a three visit Skype-through-Spring with the first graders at Darby Creek Elementary in Hilliard, Ohio. This morning I was treated to a sharing of children's poems, some written by individual students and some written together. And at the end of our time today, these young poets were surprised to each receive a copy of FOREST HAS A SONG, purchased by the Darby Creek PTO with signed bookplates I sent last week.
So many thank yous to the teachers and parents who made this exciting series possible. I learned a lot and loved following the journey of these poets through their teachers, their blogs, their Padlets, and their voices and faces on Skype. Here you can see teacher Cathy Mere's Tweet, posted the moment before children received their books!
From Teacher Cathy Mere's Twitter Stream
Skype Celebration - May 15, 2015
Photo Collage by Cathy Mere
The winners of last week's giveaway of Barry Lane's FORCE FIELD FOR GOOD CD are Linda A. and Rosi! Please send me an e-mail to amy at amylv dot com with your address, and I will pass it along to Barry. Thank you, Barry!
In case you did not see Tuesday's post, I had an extra this week. Click here to read the paper bag puppet poem and visit some kindergarten poets from Rochester, NY.
Today's Poetry Friday roundup is with Diane Mayr at Random Noodling. Noodle on over to her place to join in on the festivities.
Please share a comment below if you wish.
Thanks for explaining the reasons why you made the choices you did in writing your pigeon poem. The back-stories are always helpful to me!
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Amy,
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I wish there were more teachers like Lindsey teaching poetry and writing with young students. Creech's books are wonderful for teaching that poetry is everywhere. Her students' work is wildly creative. She has obviously opened a door for them to explore their own words and ideas. Thanks for sharing!
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